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Nina Friday ([personal profile] nina_vendredi) wrote2006-11-24 02:35 am
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Title: The Nature of Things
Series: Saiyuki
Beta rhosyn_du and andmydog

“Trap a bird in a cage. TTake away everything that defined it: its ability to fly, to sing. Create a situation where it is forced to live in a way that completely goes against its nature. Is that creature still a bird? In order to be what it is, it must live as it is meant to live. ...Maybe in its heart it remembers how to fly, and how to sing, and in its mind it does both these things and is joyful.”

"Koumyou.” said Ukoku sternly, “You’re ruining the game.” He tightened the straps on Koumyou’s wrists. “Stop talking.”

[identity profile] andmydog.livejournal.com 2006-11-24 09:47 am (UTC)(link)
Suggestions!

Take away everything that defined it: its ability to fly, to sing.

Create a situation where it is forced to live in a way that completely goes against its nature.

...Maybe in its heart it remembers how to fly, and how to sing,

"Koumyou.” said Ukoku sternly,


And with that said? I loves it. Oh my god that's wrong and I loves it.

[identity profile] nina-vendredi.livejournal.com 2006-11-24 09:57 am (UTC)(link)
Thank ya, your suggestions make the thing flow better.
Yay, my first posted fic in like, 10 years.